实例讲解托福高分作文的写作技巧

实例讲解托福高分作文的写作技巧 “言简朴实原则”是行文主张不写啰嗦或绚丽的字眼(flowery or wordy)flowery or wordy)， 一句能用两个字，绝不多加一个。 例如：At this point in time, we should pull together for our goal. (flowery or wordy)现在 我们应该为我们的目标团结一致)这句话中“At this point in time”表示“现在”， 我们完全可以用 now 来代替。 Despite the fact that my English is not very good, I am not discouraged.(flowery or wordy) 虽 然我的英语不好，但我不灰心。)这句话中 despite the fact tha t= although = though, 因此我们完全可以改成 Although my English is not very good, I am not discouraged. In the majority of cases, he likes to ride bike to the office. (flowery or wordy) 他通常喜欢 骑单车到办公室)。很简单的一句话，完全可以写成 He usually likes to ride bike to the office. 平时我们所说的用词多样化和地道并不是体现在这些时间副词或者是完 全可以简化的啰嗦句型上，而是指实用性极强的词如动词和形容词，比如： Original: Solving trivial problems in the dorm will add your social experience and help you to understand other people’s feelings and learn to be kind. Revised: Solving trivial problems in the dorm will enrich your social experience and help you to understand other people’s feelings and learn to be considerate. add,kind 表达的含义都比较宽泛。add 可以指数量上的增加，也可以指 程度的加强，对于“丰富经验、增加知识”这个意思，用 enrich 会使表达更准 确。kind 从字面意义上讲是“好的、善良的”，用 kind 来形容人无法具体地表 现出一个人的性格特征到底怎样，原句中是想表达“考虑周到、体贴入微”的 特点，要准确表达这个含义应选择 considerate。 另外，我们常见的一些累赘用词表现在句意的理解上，比如： He has had many years of (flowery or wordy)actual) experience in business. (flowery or wordy) 他有多年 经商的经验) actual 是多余的，因为 experience 已经有 actual 的意味了。 We assembled (flowery or wordy)together) all the parts for our radio. (flowery or wordy) 我们装好收音机 的零件)assemble 本身就有 together 的意思，因此 together 是多余的。 此 外 还 有 ， in reference to=about; draw to close=end; at an early date=soon 等。 总是，在托福的写作过程中，大家始终明确“精确”不代表“累赘”，能吸引 阅卷人注意的内容，不一定是冗长的句子和高难的词汇。 托福写作要避免 9 种开头方式 本文为大家整理了托福写作备考之需要避免的开头方式，便于考生托福 备考。 1、托福作文中需要避免的开头方式—废话连篇 典 型 失 败 案 例 ： Topic 1-Should college students beallowed to get married? This topic is very interesting. I'm very interestedin talking about this topic. Because I'm also a collegestudent and I'm not married…… 2、托福作文中需要避免的开头方式—中式英文 典型失败案例： Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily…… Topic 2- The population problem The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers ofShanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there. 3、托福作文中需要避免的开头方式—观点模糊 典 型 失 败 案 例 ： Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married? I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married,so this topic is very difficult for me…… 4、托福作文中需要避免的开头方式—偏离主题 典型失败案例：Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications andquality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree ordisagree with the statement? I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these importantqualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learnthese qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from manyplaces. 5、托福作文中需要避免的开头方式—语法错误 典型失败案例： Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility andalso be punished? About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right.Because teach child is parent's responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children isalso should. 6、托福作文中需要避免的开头方式—过分简单 典型失败案例：Topic-The importance of environmental protection This issue is surely very important, let's talk about it! 7、托福作文中需要避免的开头方式—意思重复 典型失败案例：Topic-Your opinion on DINK families My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing.It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society. 8、托福作文中需要避免的开头方式—胡乱翻译 典型失败案例：Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family? I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Manysons, many lucks”…… 9、托福作文中需要避免的开头方式—观点武断 典型失败案例：Topic1-The importance of confidence In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successfulpeople in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don't have confidence,they all have failed. Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don't obey the traffic rules,we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I'm sure there will be no traffic problemany more.